Give me your address so I can send my rewrite.

Let's see you do better.

But, unless we see that change of mind of Spock, which is rather important, it didn't happen. I saw Kirk saving Keeler on the staircase as a normal reaction by anyone with a conscience.
Now, I want to say that my beef detracts from the episode at all. Given what I know about what went on behind the scenes, it's rather amazing this episode got aired at all (Harlan Ellison's own attitude didn't help matters). I still love this episode and I think it's great; but I can see the missed opportunity here.

WYLDE GOOSE; Kirk was thinking about saving Edith, the staircase. Spoke must have changed his mind (back) at some point. They were there 4 3 weeks!

That's basically correct. Edith had to die but in my version, her death comes about differently.
There are two themes to approach this with. I think what Ellison was trying to avoid was the Inevitability of History theme, which is that certain things in history are unavoidable. One of the reasons why I cringe at Spectre of the Gun is in the beginning of the Melkotian simulation, Spock is saying that history cannot be altered. But the mere fact that they have to go back in time to correct something Bones did indicates that history can be changed, so the Inevitability angle can't be used. I think Ellison was deliberately attempting to put a serious conflict between Kirk and Spock, something that they would, over time, have to get over, which is what Gene objected to (and mind you I don't necessarily disagree with that, given the episodic nature of the series).
I wouldn't mind seeing what you'd have come up with.

That's basically correct. Edith had to die but in my version, her death comes about differently.

I would argue that if Edith Keeler died originally, then she had to die to restore the timeline as the Guardian stated. Anything else would be "playing dice with the future" so to speak. And for that matter, the Guardian might not have even let them return if they did anything else.

I knew about the flaws in this episode from the start, and it took Ellison's novel to confirm them for me. What Ellison wanted was a real conflict between the characters, and Gene fought him at every turn on that. I could see that he tried to sneak the beginnings of this in the episode, but we all know what happens in the end.
My biggest beef with this episode, which Ellison did try to address, was Spock's interpretation of events. It is he, alone, that determines that Edith Keeler should die, based on what he was able to record from the Guardian of Forever. But I would counter that by having both him and Kirk then travel into the portal sometime after Bones that history is theirs to write as they see fit. He only sees a glimpse of what may be, and concludes that it could only be Keeler who is so influential that she prevents America's involvement in WWII. While there have been people who have been that influential, they are incredibly rare, and they often have a great deal of help in the process. Granted, it's television, and they only have so much time to tell a story, but this is what really should've been the big point of contention between Kirk and Spock, and something that Kirk should've held a grudge over Spock for, to allow Keeler to die by being hit by a car, when it's just as possible to allow her to live, to tell her that some things need to happen and they happen for a reason that do not make any sense at the time, horrible as it is. This is the kind of thing that should've caused a rift that would take years to repair.

Je sais bien:
Awkwardness.

ALAAN 4447 A; Not even. FOREVER gives the title that, je ne sais quoi.

aroused some interest: piqued
bringing to high levels: peaked
giving you a glimpse: peeked
I welcome serious criticism.
KIRK:
Serious? Serious, Bones? It upsets the whole percentage.
("A Piece of the Action")
Well, start by changing the title to "The City on the Edge of Eternity". It refers to the same concept without the atrocious grammar.

Yes, please do so. I welcome serious criticism.
"Piqued" (sharpened, as in pico (beak)) is the usual word.

Good for you, taking one for the team!

This does arouse some interest in seeing what you're talking about, even bringing to high levels, and giving you a glimpse of my reaction to your discourse. In other words, you've piqued/peaked/peeked my curiosity.
So I would be interested in seeing it. Shall I PM you my email address?